PN Reflection

When I started to write this personal narrative I felt great confusion on what I wanted to write about but as the process went on it became easier. After writing for a while I found that this paper was pretty easy to write but the hard part for me was being thoughtfully descriptive. I don't know why but it is kind of hard for me to write like that. Otherwise over all this was the most fun paper to write and it really opened my eyes and let me think outside the box.

Feedback

The feedback that I received was pretty much what I expected. I need to add more descriptive phrases to liven up my paper. I feel like that is exactly what I am going to do. I just need to doctor the whole thing up and add a bunch of descriptive words. I may need to add a little about the what I have learned part.

What worked and what didn't work

When moving from sketch to draft I tried to refine my story and be more descriptive. Although I am not very good at this I did my best. I still need some work on the what I know now what I didn't know then part of the paper.

Reflecting

The thing that struck me most is the feelings that I felt when I read it out loud. I have told the story a million times but I have never written it down. It is different trying to use descriptive words on paper rather than just speaking it to someone off the top of my head. I liked really reflecting on the story and what happened. The story I want to tell is what you learn from your experiences and how to use what you have learned in everyday life.
I would answer the so what question by just asking the reader to think about what it would be like and just letting them visualize what happened and how I learned from it.
The main thing I am planning on doing is just finishing the story and using more visualizations.

Evaluation

1. The thing that surprised me most is how much I remembered from the experience even though I was knocked unconscious. This probably wont be the focus of my paper but I might want to include it in there somewhere.
2. The very first line of the sketch I think is the most important line because it says everything that is in the sketch in one line kind of. This could be a beginning for more fast writing. I think it it the major theme of the paper.
3. The part that is the most important has yet to be written. The most compelling part of this paper is what happens after the accident. I'm not sure if this should come at the beginning or the end as of right now but this could be the lead in the draft.
4. My favorite part is what I have learned from this experience. I have yet to emphasize on the learning part but that will come more in the draft part I think.

Evaluation

1. The thing that surprised me most is how much I remembered from the experience even though I was knocked unconscious. This probably wont be the focus of my paper but I might want to include it in there somewhere.
2. The very first line of the sketch I think is the most important line because it says everything that is in the sketch in one line kind of. This could be a beginning for more fast writing. I think it it the major theme of the paper.
3. The part that is the most important has yet to be written. The most compelling part of this paper is what happens after the accident. I'm not sure if this should come at the beginning or the end as of right now but this could be the lead in the draft.
4. My favorite part is what I have learned from this experience. I have yet to emphasize on the learning part but that will come more in the draft part I think.

imagery

When I was young I felt like everyone in the world was happy and everyone just went along their lives and had fun and did what they needed to do. After time and schooling they started teaching us about the world. They taught us that there were beautiful places to see and visit. They also taught us about the persecution that had happened in the past and what is still happening in some countries. This feeling is a huge letdown. You want everyone to be happy and when you find out some people have no food or water it makes you sad. I wanted to help these people. I went to a Catholic school and we had fund raisers to help areas where they didn't have any food and I got really into it and made lots of money and sent it over but didn't see any results which was kind of a let down also.